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ShiroEmpathy → Kel
when I say jumbled, what I mean is that you could add a little more space between the paragraphs. The dialogue should be a little bit more separated, to give your fic a cleaner look as well as minimize confusion. I actually think the plot will be pretty interesting, it's just changing your formatting may make your readers feel more comfortable when reading and they may understand the plot better.
Oct 18 2010 10:15 PM
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